Call it a boat, not a vessel.
The balloon struck not stuck the victim. The victim was gassing his car and got carjacked.
You will easily learn why you are writing a police report, what to include, what not to include. When training police officers in report writing, one of the authors Brucealways said a good report should stand alone and is like a good joke — if you have to explain it, it sucks!
Poor Example: I got the call at pm and immediately responded to the Shell station. This book is current, relevant and will show anyone at any level of law enforcement how to successfully write a police report. Targeted, easy to read, entertaining, with effective lessons and samples throughout.
You get more writing practice than most professionals in other fields. Another issue is that unwanted words and awkward expressions crept in.
He served on numerous hiring and promotional boards; authored and co-authored policies and procedures; created lesson plans to instruct new and veteran officers in a variety of topics; and established policy and guidelines for an improved method of conducting police lineups and eye-witness testimony.
Change one sentence to active voice. He admitted it, but she said she was not involved.